lala nana › Drowning Under Stormy Seas by Molly Claire May 8, 2011
Oh, I really like this! It's a very well-done poem. I'm surprised to see how young you are! The only line I have issue with is "crashes, screams, pain". The "pain" lends it a little bit of an emo mood, if you catch my drift. I'd find a little less of a common word to describe it, I suppose. "Noise" might be a good alternative. Otherwise, it's an exquisite poem! I like it quite a bit! Very good!