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Greta Wocheski Oct 2016
we don't sleep here, we just hope
hope for some happiness to arrive in the post.
we don't eat here, we just smoke
smoke cigarettes even if we choke.

- g.w
the city can only hope.
Greta Wocheski Oct 2016
and i, i ask why
my life goes on and on
and i, i ask why
i'm alive
                                                                                          - g.w
dichotomy. i was doing an acapella freestyle.
the moon asked the crow, why.
death is not knocking
on my door;
i am knocking
on his
come back. we miss you.
  Oct 2016 Greta Wocheski
Paul Hansford
If you read somebody’s poem and it makes you want to say,
“I think this piece is wonderful; it really made my day,”
just go ahead and say it – feedback like this is good,
but saying why you like it will please them (well, it should).

If someone that you don’t know says, “Please comment on my writing,”
and you look at it, and find it … let’s say, rather unexciting,
then don’t forget – be tactful, find something good to say
before you start on finding fault – don’t ruin someone’s day.

And if you think it’s terrible, be careful how you speak.
Some people write as therapy; their life may be quite bleak.
Don’t be too harshly critical and leave them feeling worse,
but simply go to look elsewhere, and just ignore their verse.

Some poems, though, may leave you with a puzzle or a question,
or even make you want to give some tentative suggestion.
There’s nothing wrong with doing this – just get it off your chest,
but don’t think your ideas are necessarily the best.

With members, though, who claim they are God’s gift to Poesy,
(if there’s nothing to commend them as far as you can see)
you can state your own opinion – of course you have the right –
but don’t forget the golden rule: *be honest but polite.
I have to confess, I wrote this one some tme ago for a different site, where it was boringly common for people to ask you to comment their writing, without commenting the other person's first, which explains the somewhat grumpy two stanas now deleted.  The principle, however, still stands.
If you want to make suggestions, etc., as in stanza 4,  it is by far the best to do this by private message, so that you don't appear to be setting yourself up as some kind of authority.
Greta Wocheski Oct 2016
i stopped writing, i thought it was good for me.
turns out it was you who wasn't good for me.

- g.w
oops.
Greta Wocheski Oct 2016
the world will still move but my head will ache.
this thought of you gnawing at my brains
in my days, in my sleep, your memory remains.
                                                                                            - g.w
i don't want you, i want you, i don't want you, i miss you.
Greta Wocheski Oct 2016
counting words,
not my weight
as i write
this poem.
- g.w
i've lost 0.7kg incase you were wondering.
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