#beginner poems on Hello Poetry

Mateo Mar 2019

It took just one look
To get me completely hooked.
Our eyes met for just a second
And both our smiles broadened.
Your face had me lost in a maze
I thought I solved it, but I was still dazed.
Nothing in this world could compare
To how amazing it was to stare.
Except when you came up to me
I felt completely free.

This poem is dedicated to the most beautiful girl in the world.

#look #stare #eyes #love #amateur #beginner #middle #happiness #lovely #young

Jen Mar 2019

****...that’s crazy

And if I love I do completely
And if I hurt I do alone
And if you ask I’ll say I’m fine
And I’ll wonder if that was a mistake
But you can’t carry the contents of my heart
Without folding yourself
And that’s just the nature of your gravity
That makes it so hard to trust you completely
So I wait for the day
Where I can give my sorrows to someone strong enough to carry them
And they’ll know what to do with me.

#heartbroken #beginner #feedback

Jen Mar 2019

A Mother’s Wish

And I vowed
She would never hold the contents of her mind behind because she felt she was less than divine
That every word that escaped the beautiful belly of the gold mine I planted in her would be expelled from the root at every moment she could
That her first words would be I know before I think
I can before I might.
And her voice would never drift off into the wind, unheard and forgotten
You would hear the harshness of her winds before you even turned around to see her because she is ten feet tall in mentality and in physicality .
Because I will teach her she is worthy.
So she doesn’t shy away into the void that is so comfortable .
So that her throat will never know a lump so large it stops the wind from blowing her music.
So that she will never doubt herself
Like her mother did.

Hey everyone I’m an amateur a huge one and I know punctuation is bad I didn’t edit it just looking for feedback any feed back would be great thanks!

#girls #poem #beginner #give #feedback

km Feb 2019

hier soir

j’ai rêvé tu et moi nous sommes embrasses
c’était merveilleux et surréaliste
j’ai réveillée et j’ai trouvé c’est faux
et maintenant, je suis…perdue

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i dreamt you and i kissed
it was marvelous and surreal
i woke up and i found it's false
and now, i am... lost

This is rough because I'm only in my second semester of French, but I hope the meaning is still there

#french #love #lost #beginner

Jacob Soriano Jan 2019

Help me forget, I was in love

You told me to help you forget about him...
All the kisses
All the soft and gentle whispers of love
You wanted to forget his touch…
How it felt to be in his arms
And the feeling of his lips brushing yours.
So I did -... and then I fell in love with you.
I fell in love with your gracious smile.
Your smooth porcelain skin as if i was brushing a marble counter
And you perfect pinkish lips that were made by God himself.
But it was all a lie.
I fell in love with a demon , disguised as a angel
I can’t describe the amount of pain you have brought upon my soul.
You gave me false hope, as I believed we would be together forever
The smile and the kisses were as if you loved me
I fell under your spell as you made me believe that being with you was perfect
You butchered my soul and pierced my organs
Twisting ,crushing , and stomping my heart until no more blood dropped.
I gave you my all, my heart and soul because I loved the way you treated me.
You were the end of me
You were the meticulous angel that sent the hellhounds to eat my soul away
And even till now, I can still look you in the face and say “I love you”.

#aspiringpoet #beginner #brokenheart