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"She's so familiar with being rejected, that even her shadow refuses to be with her."
"we all eat lies when our hearts are hungry."
#d.a.
 Apr 2019 blackbiird
Veta
Selfish
 Apr 2019 blackbiird
Veta
I see a child who has been dealt the wrong cards in life and blames others for the hand he picked
 Apr 2019 blackbiird
Nat Lipstadt
Poem Analysis

1st read, I thought gibberish,
2nd I thought Hmmm,
3rd I thought interesting,
4th I felt genius
.  billy


your poem comment-dissects my poem
my process,
a marathon interview for a new poem pole position,
limb by limb, word by word,
chewed and re-chewed,
like a tiring piece of bubble gum,
the flavor remaining ebbs, but is not extinguished,
and can live in your mouth,
forever

and the praise and this poem,
not a rodomontade,
for your comment dear Billy,
is the process description of a poet’s labor,
from word first to a baby’s birth,

gibberish into genius

emergent from first pain, then pushing, then tilled, at long last,
the dirtiest immaculate conception beautiful

billy reads my rambling, silly abstruse^ & wrote me:
1st read I thought gibberish,
2nd I thought Hmmm,
3rd I thought interesting,
4th I felt genius


this is a much loved critique
for I well recall each step of creation,
a summarizing parallel
that your words+genes replicated so well,
forgiving you a minor typo, Billy,

it was genus, not genius that you meant

(but then again, why quibble over a miscellaneous, harmless, delighting, tiny little  extra i...not me, said he, my muse ego )

Billy has gone gray dotted, but his dot, his comment,
with gratitude,
in me, he,
lives for ever

I feel gibberish coming on...
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"Autumn killed the summer with the softest kiss."
 Apr 2019 blackbiird
Ithaca
Today I’ll breathe
Tomorrow I’ll live
Today you’ll receive
Tomorrow you’ll give
 Apr 2019 blackbiird
Mykenzie
Wishes
 Apr 2019 blackbiird
Mykenzie
Wishes
are simply that..

wishes
are daydreams

Wishes
can be reality,

wishes
are unlikely
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