The toothbrush starts, “Enameled crooked crescents fence
a cavern filled by slimy growths and walls that tense.”
The towel ruffles, “Four protrusions rife with joints;
the fifth a rounded stump with sev’ral gentle points.”
“Agreed. The knobs and knuckles wear a supple coat;”
the loofah huffs, “it’s gritty, slick, and prone to bloat.”
The eyebrow brush retorts, “It’s two retracting domes
that cause a row of strands to flutter when one roams.”
“While ‘domes’ is right, I venture ‘jiggle’ as more apt -
along with perky, tapered tips.” the brassiere flapped.
The ****** giggle, “‘Bouncy’ could suffice as well,
but don’t forget the dampened folds and prickly swell.”
“Absurd!” exclaims the hairbrush, “More like brittle twine;
Entangled, oily knots that never quite align.”
“Not twine, but thistles bushing out in sweeping arcs,”
the razor sighs, “from paper that too clearly marks.”
A glassy voice laments, “Not one of them’s correct -
how easy this would be, if you could all reflect.”
Humor is so not my forte, but this was for the Day 3 prompt in SingPoWriMo, so I gave it a shot. It's about bathroom objects trying to describe their user. Critique is welcome!
Are the indirect descriptions easy/hard to understand?
Does the ‘twist’ at the ending work? Or just fall flat?
How long did it take you to realize what the poem is trying to do?
