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they said that i wrote nursery rhymes

that my poems lacked emotion

i don't know what they were reading

i just know what i was feeling
you have to learn a lesson, before you can teach a lesson
all my life i thought i was trying
i laughed just to keep from crying
looking back, i went down the wrong track

just more memories to dismember

i surrender

all the time that i spent just wasting
was only time i was facing
looking back, at every rock hard fact

only bad things that i remember

i surrender
Getting back to experimenting with syllable counts and consonant sounds, and how they effect the flow of a poem/song. Here, I used 9-8-9-9-4 syllable count.
Work work no time
Time time to rhyme
Rhyme rhyme be mine
Mine mine heart thine
Bare feet on beach
nature's love to reach
Sands caress the feet
Life's curing street

Bare feet on beach
Peace in heart doth teach
Nature's lessons to preach
Yet to humans doth it reach

Plastic bags tangle thy feet
Stench of waste nature's defeat
Broken glass dangers seat
Oh Tis life's defeat

Useless thrown to waste
Let not be in haste
For waste doth not fade in haste
Let Tis not be nature's fate
Inspired by true event every sunday I go for a walk in beach marina beach one of the longest beach in India let us keep it clean
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