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hmmm..... moved to Scotland to fade into the warm loving atmosphere of Dumfries and Galloway. Now living in Dunblane. Been writing poetry for a wee …
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Shannon Aug 2013
Hanging Out
Shannon
Aug 2013
Everyone at the gym is a slasher,”
I explain,
“actress/writer/actually works the front desk full time.”
Wyatt tells me he goes to the gym to hook up with guys in the sauna.
“Yeah, I always see you boys in the see through showers
that face the front desk.
I get all hot on my shift and have to go home alone.”
“Well, you know how us guys are,”
says Wyatt,
“Why are you laughing?”
“Because it’s true.”
He gives me his number.
“We should hang out.”
“I don’t know what to do,”
says Wyatt.
“Betty Blue at The Egyptian maybe?
Maybe the shooting range in Burbank?
I want a drink.”
“So drink,” I say.
“All I need is a forty and a sack.
Why are you laughing?”
asks Wyatt.
“Wouldn’t even have to go out.”
“Hey Wyatt, thanks for callin’ all the time.
I want to do something,
but I only have seven dollars.
I tried to go dancing with my friend last night,
Made it all the way to the club,
but didn’t have the cover and had to go home.
I’m bored and tired and it’s hot.”
Wyatt reminds me, “I have my copy of Women for you to borrow.
Chianti and spaghetti at my apartment for dinner?”
“Sounds great,” I say.
“Let’s get the five dollar bottle with the straw holder,” he says.
“Maybe we can splurge on garlic bread.
You know, my roommate is fifty and broke.
I hear him crying every day.
He still tries to get money from his mother.”
“I’m broke,”
Wyatt tells me.
“I have my cds at a pawn shop.
I may have to skip town. I have some trouble.”
“These things happen,” I tell him.
“Call me once in a while.
Let me know how you’re doing.”
I explain,
“actress/writer/actually works the front desk full time.”
Wyatt tells me he goes to the gym to hook up with guys in the sauna.
“Yeah, I always see you boys in the see through showers
that face the front desk.
I get all hot on my shift and have to go home alone.”
“Well, you know how us guys are,”
says Wyatt,
“Why are you laughing?”
“Because it’s true.”
He gives me his number.
“We should hang out.”
“I don’t know what to do,”
says Wyatt.
“Betty Blue at The Egyptian maybe?
Maybe the shooting range in Burbank?
I want a drink.”
“So drink,” I say.
“All I need is a forty and a sack.
Why are you laughing?”
asks Wyatt.
“Wouldn’t even have to go out.”
“Hey Wyatt, thanks for callin’ all the time.
I want to do something,
but I only have seven dollars.
I tried to go dancing with my friend last night,
Made it all the way to the club,
but didn’t have the cover and had to go home.
I’m bored and tired and it’s hot.”
Wyatt reminds me, “I have my copy of Women for you to borrow.
Chianti and spaghetti at my apartment for dinner?”
“Sounds great,” I say.
“Let’s get the five dollar bottle with the straw holder,” he says.
“Maybe we can splurge on garlic bread.
You know, my roommate is fifty and broke.
I hear him crying every day.
He still tries to get money from his mother.”
“I’m broke,”
Wyatt tells me.
“I have my cds at a pawn shop.
I may have to skip town. I have some trouble.”
“These things happen,” I tell him.
“Call me once in a while.
Let me know how you’re doing.”
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patty m Comments are a wonderful gift. I love your poem and the emotions that surface you are truly gifted.
hugs
Sally A Bayan So much truth in your wondeful, touching words, Born..
I keep coming back to this poem...just had to repost.
Thank you for sharing
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Jamie King I like the flow here the transition from one imagery to the imagery while maintaining the same flow requires a certain degree of finesse. Excellently executed piece
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Botan A high tech emotional intelegence will take over while humans express thier feelings by emoji. good writing
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SøułSurvivør An awesome tribute! You're one of the poets I would elect for showing the most growth of any on this site. My heart twinkle with happiness, TOO! Thanks for your heart, Born! ☆♡☆
Lori Jones McCaffery You make exquisite use of the words you have captured, Born. Keep thirsting. Love
SøułSurvivør Awe! I'm so glad to encourage you... you have such a powerful way with words. An innate talent. I count you as one of my best friends here. Be blessed!
Poem. 5 million am not just a number
Corvus Wonderfully compassionate. It's so easy to be kind and sympathetic to those on your doorstep. Those further away but in even greater need are often ignored. Brilliant write.
Debbie Jean Embrey ***! how those words spoke to me! Very well done! I love the part about calling you 'Messenger.' Keep inking! :)
Poem. She's said II
Terry Jordan Amazing piece, esp. "It is for us to wash away our painful confusion with tears...." I'm sending a sympathy card today to the mother of a former student of mine, so this really speaks to that most terrible loss that we have no word for it. TFS, Born
Poem. I won't forget that you liked my poetry
Mary-Elizabeth Cotton Beautiful write! I especially love the lines "When I could barely form words,/that would impress my shadow."
Poem. I'm Born
Pradip Chattopadhyay your words are fabulous
Poem. Hi(gh)
Kim Johanna Baker Great write Born...I must say, you are a great writer and enjoy very much your pieces...this is raw and gets the message across.. tyfs... kimx
Poem. If I told you my story
Law lith iminika Reading this was like observing a preview to a movie, but I didn't pay for it, instead showed up willingly. And I'm hungry for knowledge and inspiration because I was refused popcorn
Poem. Thank you Pamela Rae
Pamela Rae Please know that you have such talent and your words not only touch me, but so many here--keep writing, expressing and touching our souls, dear Born. You are a gift to this world and deserve to find your way, to embrace peace and tranquility and it will come. Will be sending along good vibes, thoughts for peace and happiness and Room to breathe with ease... (((hugs)))
Poem. Hello poetry
Wolf spirit Wow ..is this a poem . Because Id rather read this than delve on eloquent flattery of wistful words . Honesty expressed with such brevity is still the best policy .
Poem. When my heart pounds a little bit more
Modern Serenity very well executed! truly deserves to be the poem for atleast a week. freaking fantastic poem. well done. honestly totally jealous of your poem its truly amazing and well said.
Poem. Shantel
--- Superbly penned, echoes of the great Pablo Neruda
Poem. Here we are
K Balachandran so peaceful and meditative
yet passion filled love and life
chiseled and beautiful...without hiding truth
you have eyes full of love and light
exquisite..
Bala
Poem. Virgo
Star BG And..... open gateway to healing the soul.you are such a master with words. Thank you
Poem. Dusty coin
Pax there will always be hope, even just a spark, or one candle, it can do many things in the dark..
Poem. My deepest sympathies
South by Southwest There are answers to every question you pose . Only by a lifetime of searching will you find them .
Poem. Muse dear daughter
Sylvia Frances Chan A most divine poem, loving and caring words. I have enjoyed this poem very much. God's Blessings be upon thee. Thank you for sharing this divine piece.
Poem. Leonard Cohen
Lazhar Bouazzi Ah! Wonderful poem about one of my favorite poets/composers/singers of all time! Thank you for sharing
Poem. This poem III
Wyatt Such a harsh, blunt piece. It hit me right in the gut! Congrats on the daily!
Poem. I won't forget that you liked my poem
patty m Comments are a wonderful gift. I love your poem and the emotions that surface you are truly gifted.
hugs
Sally A Bayan So much truth in your wondeful, touching words, Born..
I keep coming back to this poem...just had to repost.
Thank you for sharing
Poem. Juliet
Jamie King I like the flow here the transition from one imagery to the imagery while maintaining the same flow requires a certain degree of finesse. Excellently executed piece
Poem. Un(real) istic
Botan A high tech emotional intelegence will take over while humans express thier feelings by emoji. good writing
Poem. Poetic flavor
SøułSurvivør An awesome tribute! You're one of the poets I would elect for showing the most growth of any on this site. My heart twinkle with happiness, TOO! Thanks for your heart, Born! ☆♡☆
Lori Jones McCaffery You make exquisite use of the words you have captured, Born. Keep thirsting. Love
SøułSurvivør Awe! I'm so glad to encourage you... you have such a powerful way with words. An innate talent. I count you as one of my best friends here. Be blessed!
Poem. 5 million am not just a number
Corvus Wonderfully compassionate. It's so easy to be kind and sympathetic to those on your doorstep. Those further away but in even greater need are often ignored. Brilliant write.
The most important part of posting a poem is the response you get, I'd love to appreciate every single one of you for the words you offered. For those who didn't make the list, I still appreciate you.
This poem is coming from an emotional place, for the longest time I never believed in myself. But now I do, thanks a lot
This poem is coming from an emotional place, for the longest time I never believed in myself. But now I do, thanks a lot