she crawls slowly through the mist in the forest of demise where the dark paths turn and twist hidden from the open skies
once she invites you in she brings you to your knees like a thorn across your skin like the sting of a thousand bees
where secret screams exist going there would be unwise the lips of pain are gently kissed as another victim cries
she lives within the caves and she crawls beneath the grass digging shallow graves for the lives about to pass
she whispers like the wind blowing through the trees where she lives within she is the haunting breeze
if you find yourself in her midst never look into her eyes just pretend she doesn't exist don't be the next who dies
a friend told me that they liked this version better, so i decided to post it...feedback is welcome, and i would like to know if this six stanza poem is better than the original three stanza version