I was the daughter of winter when you began to whisper in my frigid ear. I lifted two snowballed hands and chiseled through the solid ice; bitter words pierced the raw mist surrounding me, but you were not disarmed. I tried to stop the thawing, dreamed lustily of a rapidly approaching sleep, that deep freeze and muffled silence. You stayed, shivered, and I was suffuse in tender sunlight, for you were an Indian summer, a falsehood by very nature—false hope, false promises, false warmth. Your lilting birds and sultry air enchanted—I was dizzy and drunk, melting slowly. You sang in the soft breezes, danced frantically in the wake of falling leaves, and swore with each delicate blue sky: It will always be this lovely! But you were just a charade. I was no more than a pool, heated from the diminishing glow of your fervor’s twilight, and Autumn waited, patient, as the mask finally slipped.
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