Starlit seeking waves against a summer's blow
meet a shallow shore on a midnight of May.
A day dreamer grazes white lights of a night sky
with twinkled gazes-she wished for a touch,
bare feet tickles wet sand,
heartbeats skips a harmony,
a longing desire locks and loads
firing wanderlust into star-soot boots
on and upwards she goes
becoming breathing breaths
of a dream, that wished to live,
and live it did
10 Mays later-
amidst violent radiance
a contrail climbs- through earth's window
and into a void of shadowed dawn
she goes.
The End.
work in progress, rip it apart.. any suggestions? Trying to write about a girl who wants to go into space to explore the vast universe; but I want the poem to be a picture of a moment in time when she realized, it was possible. I don't like what I have written so far so don't pander me with a generic comment about you loving my poem (blah blah blah); Please don't do that, it irritates me. If you liked it, tell me why and tell me what needs to be improved.