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I took my lovely niece at 9 years
to the city as she's never been
She grasped my hand, through the fear
trembling and backing off at my rear
of strangers, never known and seen

Never a father but that time I felt one
Paternal over an innocent lovely one
firmly grasping fist, trusting me you see,
I said, you'll be fine and always will be
I grew her confidence at the movies
A Disney film that was spooky
Monsters Incorporated
a classic to be said
Such a lovely bond her and I.

I took her to the confectionary section
but couldn't see them unlike me,
So I grabbed her tummy and legs,
Lifted her up and a smile spread
Even the lady behind the counter,
absolutely adored her,
she chose a bag of crisps & m&ms.

Now, she has kids all of her own
So proud of how she has grown
Still so lovely, and so strong
And a lover to that she belongs
Another revision not seen here. Lots of changes.
I posted this back in August 2023 on All-Poetry.
This is the original version and the comments.
https://allpoetry.com/poem/17311493-Niece-Visits-The-City-by-Ryan-Geoffrey-Hayward
Ryan Geoffrey Hayward
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Ryan Geoffrey Hayward  47/M/Oz
(47/M/Oz)   
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