Hair in braids hanging down, The Sun in rays shining all around. Glimmers and shimmers on skin so fair That glows upon long dark hair. Bare feet tread on soil rich and brown Pattering as they touch the ground. The softest air in rhythm is growing And scents of ocean breezes flowing To a blue haze above the mountains. This is where my heart is soaring 'Or mounts, oceans, 'n watery fountains.
Any help appreciated with this stanza: "Glimmers and shimmers on skin so fair That glows upon long dark hair." "That glows upon long dark hair." feel off slightly like it needs a word or something.