The flat pasture was disturbed by a dip A markèd groove in its dark, mossy surface I tipped my head over the hole, inching gradually towards the centre Smooth and immaculate The water served as a perfect mirror; my face against the dusky sky I squinted into its inky eyes, searching for familiarity But curiosity got the better of me And I fell.
The initial contact was the worst: A shock of cold slapped my face and I saw nothing But an ominous blur of dappled green light The heavy water pushed me further – down, down – To uncertain depths Movement stung my skin, so I decided to freeze.
Unconsciously I drifted to the mouth again And shot up Spluttering and gasping; the air was damp and heavy Pathetic and sopping, I crawled out and sat beside the edge The sky had darkened a little Though there were still enough streaks of blue for the pool to reflect back at me Pure as before I tried to emulate this static perfection But drops and tears ran down my body in a restless stream And I couldn’t control it.
I don’t considered this to be finished and would like to edit it further. I want it to flow nicely and I feel the phrasing is a little clunky in parts. All suggestions/comments for improvement welcome.