Feb 2016
Heavenward stretching lofty spires (a)
Man created strife (b)
In his penchant to fly higher (a)
He built a world that co-conspires (a)
All he sees is hate gone rife (b)
Realizing it's too late (c)
To carve out peace with use of knife (b)
There's too much hate (c)
For one man's life (b)
Man created strife (b)
In his penchant to fly higher (a)
He built a world that co-conspires (a)
All he sees is hate gone rife (b)
Realizing it's too late (c)
To carve out peace with use of knife (b)
There's too much hate (c)
For one man's life (b)
The poem feels almost asyncopated and I chose my diction carefully to slow the pace down and make it almost choppy ..to reflect a disharmony of man's actions from his professed religious and lofty ideals. I left my rhyming notations to reflect the difficult pattern this poem required. a/b/a/a/b/c/b/c/b ...I'm really gravitating to short form poetry more n more. Your critique is always solicited to improve the craft! Thank you!
