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Feb 2014
no no no you're doing it all wrong
the chorus is way too short
the intro is way too long
what am I supposed to do with this
i can't use it
you spilled way too much art in this music
you used to many words, nothing repeats
and i can still hear your voice over the sound of the beat
*there's too much substance
people can't dance to this
collin
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collin  30/M/coming home.
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