Back then I would wait by phone just in case she'd call. Shuffling through my old MySpace messages, I tried to remember the way that I used to think as I wrote to friends in acronyms and broken words.
Shuffling through my old MySpace messages, I remembered my sweaty palms clicking “Send” as I wrote to friends in acronyms and broken words begging them to understand that I couldn't carry on like this.
I remembered my sweaty palms clicking “Send” They told me to change, while I spent my nights begging them to understand that I couldn't carry on like this: A girl who only came back when a clever boy got the best of her.
They told me to change, while I spent my nights drunk on cheap stolen beer and plans of escaping a girl who only came back when a clever boy got the best of her. But I could never say “Not tonight” to her – or to anyone, really.
Drunk on cheap stolen beer and plans of escaping, I figured I’d run to California, or somewhere farther, but I could never say “Not tonight” to her – or to anyone, really. being a heap of ****** flesh on the floor was better than being alone
I figured I’d run to California, or somewhere farther. I tried to remember the way that I used to think: Being a heap of ****** flesh on the floor was better than being alone back then. I would wait up by the phone just in case she'd call.
I revised this by using the correct form of a pantoum, rather than tweaking it.