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Sep 2012
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                  sunlit feather,
   frays cut a shadow
of barbed wire






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this morning i made 'barbed shadow-wire' by turning the 'barbs' of a feather in my car vent into and away from the sun, and instantly thought of Angelou's, I Know Why The Caged Bird Sings, and Dunbar's, Sympathy.  even commutes to work can be poetic.
the fact that 'feather' and 'wire' form a slant rhyme, and that the 'barbed wire' is a kind of metaphor (even though the shadow really looked like barbed wire!)--all this sort of bucks haiku tradition (though some classic haiku do use metaphor and rhyme on rare occasions). and this isn't really a senryu, right, since it's not funny or about... well i guess maybe it could be about human nature.  either way, would be curious as to what haiku float your boat and which ones seem like just a joke ;) even if this is one of them, or doesn't it constitute a flout?
vircapio gale
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