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Tin Girl

A pitch black blanket of unwound strands

Lays splayed before broken words in impotent rage

Breathing ragged against a winter window

 

Mirrors outlined in dark silk mock all they reflect

And tell no truths in their unwashed humor

But smile like cats eyes at the moon

 

A four chambered cavern sits sealed in frozen stone

With faded cave paintings raving in the dark

Hinting at old fires that burned

 

Simmering thinly and frail beneath a calm front

A snap on the edge of the cusp is only a

Sudden strike away and expecting the spark

 

So the frail crescent scratched in sand fails its promise

And gives away all it said it stood for

In the name of some sad joke

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Written by
james-banks-worsham
34 / M / American
Published
Apr 21, 2012
Lines·Words
15·121
Notes

This poem's evolved a lot. kind of a very early experiment in objective correlative for me so it might seem opaque in meaning. while it's very open to interpretation, and I welcome those, for me it's really just describing or creating an impression of a girl I briefly knew back in the day. We were never close but she did leave a deep imprint at the time. Each stanza is supposed to describe a feature of hers while together summing up what I concluded, right or wrongly, about her character and mindset. In

corresponding order, I hope people might picture her hair, eyes, heart, mind, and smile with each new stanza. The reader can judge how successful I was, though the possible need for this explanation may be a bad indicator

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