Take it from me youngster, figuratively I literally have no possessions
But surely learn from your mistakes More of less of those encounters
More experiences without the hate Alive and happy thankful just to be
So youngster
now take it from me, My experiences stand ahead you...
Live life for you the truth of whom is Grace There is serenity in being happy a face Beaming
Real joy is honest a being Who exudes the love of Life, a light
That is the absolute of You know Who Soul that is a River Doubtless we began, now to see
The constructs of trying Try a brotherly peace,
The lovely existence without drowning the pearl The suffocations Subdegation of our miracle world
Take it from me, youngster You only rob yourself of illumine nations (Ask) I've been stealing from my own/me? Who-dat? (A puppet) If nothing else no one will dispair
When no one cares to wake
Time will cease, when no one watches
Now Pay close attention to the joys Of life you have pretended decoy
Live like you love to live your life, Truly utterly Fear free
Breathe each minute passing With thankful joyful and sincerely
Return the gift of chi Most positively the peace we send out, now Just be mindful youngsters,
We make our own hells mouth
Chose to be Yourself enlightened Be youthful and truly speak freely Alright youngster ?
Now take it from me I give you love
I wish you everlasting
Peace.
A rewrite and shift in structure. Experimenting with a new perspective. What'd you think?