this is where it was always leading this parting of the ways, this fleeing from the sore shots of life's arrows it was always coming, this pulling asunder in the glow of a last twilight so fare thee well my friend and foe you who slew my hopes and dreams and made sure there were no streams to cool my burning soul and quench this horrible thirst that still persists i hunger for the warmth you exuded and thirst for that temperate streak in you, a virtue now so rare and dear in this world most are well-schooled in shameless artifice so here now i sit in this elevated oblivion watching you melt into the unkind distance fare thee well, my spring and my nemesis i shall in time learn to want nothing gone
I have fine-tuned this poem and I feel that it's now tighter and much closer to what I want. There is a sense in which in all true art we always fall short of the target, the more to strive, therefore.