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Don't get me wrong, I love this site, but we could be pushing the paradigm.
So here's the suggestion: I have posted five links to songs I enjoy listening to.
If you like my earlier work, you probably will like the songs too.
So, just pick one, and post a poem as a comment at the bottom of the page.
I will post a response poem, and anyone who wants to post a response after that can.
No comments, just response poems.
If this sounds like something you might be interested in,
well then listen, and write and post.

Hopefully we can turn this page into a deranged adventure.
Thank you for reading.

TD
#1
http://m.youtube.com/#/watch?desktop_uri=%2Fwatch%3Fv%3DsTr6IynsApM&v;=sTr6IynsApM≷=US

#2
http://m.youtube.com/#/watch?desktop_uri=%2Fwatch%3Fv%3DHxGxs9uhgco&v;=HxGxs9uhgco≷=US

#3
http://m.youtube.com/#/watch?desktop_uri=%2Fwatch%3Fv%3Dn0t8f5bVs94&v;=n0t8f5bVs94≷=US

#4
http://m.youtube.com/#/watch?desktop_uri=%2Fwatch%3Fv%3DOoBt2N_TDmA&v;=OoBt2N_TDmA≷=US

#5
http://m.youtube.com/#/watch?desktop_uri=%2Fwatch%3Fv%3Dp4ZLzpVdF5g&v;=p4ZLzpVdF5g≷=US
I beheld terrible sights of horrifying things; with frightened eyes I saw the dragonflies, soaring on their brittle, burning wings. They came from the darker places of the rivers of screaming faces that branched out into mazes, of smaller ****** streams. The banks of the streams still smelled and steamed and were lined with the cast off crowns of kings, their fallen skulls among these golden things and still there were other, more sinister beings, beings that froze me cold and made me shake as they appeared to me in the shape of snakes, with teeth like sharpened iron stakes, that seemed to drip and gnash and gleam. Oh how they moved so menacing, slithering through their venomous oily sheen, with knife like tongues that cut so clean, all images of things that cannot be unseen. They were weaving about, in and out, and between, surging wildly, like an ocean of green, and no matter where I would stand, I was just a mortal man, in a place where safety was an intangible thing. I was losing my mind, about to scream, these detestable sights that were so vivid and keen, my sanity was frayed, bursting at the seams, but then I opened my eyes and awoke from my dream.
Winter Wolves
Last night i dreamt of the wolves,
winter wolves with icy eyes
hiding under the icy sky
they're eyes were like the city night
beautiful big and bright
One in body motion unsighted
one in spirit thoughts united
they are swift and graceful
Winter wolves with human eyes
Quickly into the trees
invisible beneath the leaves
This pack of winter wolves
the ones with icy human eyes
eyes, mysterious enchanting and enticing
some are misty like smoky lies
some are dark old and wise
some are blue bright and true
some are light young and new
as morning light
escapes through the clouds
their fur shines silky fur shines
gray like faded shoes
black sleek dark and new
snow white with eyes of blue
black as a night with no moon
Winter wolves with icy eyes
winter wolves that rule the night
actually was based on a dream about wolves...guess not much to say there, it turned into more of a metaphore of longing and lonliness, but started just about the wolves
If you were a god for a day
With the world in your hands,
To mould as clay,
Would you delay to start anew?
Wipe the slate clean
Bidding evil adieu.

Personally?

If it walks then let it run,
If it talks then let it sing,
If it flies then let it soar
Higher than it's ever been.
If if wanders let it roam,
If it absconds then leave it so,
If it dares then let it dream
That it is greater than it seems.
And if it all shall stumble
Shoulders once held firm
That start to crumble,
Under the weight of our
Burdened thoughts.
Then let those bones reform,
Skin sewn anew,
Or it shall forever be for naught.
Cobra's breath
through yard iron teeth,
sullen swank and sway.

Shant no man stand
where WILL be loosed
till gait and gravity
sound pounding shoe.

Within no glass wall
to splinter and fly,
till distant point
seen with thine eye,

Pass behind
to settle in cell,
being recalled of fear
or a rainy day,

Casting visions
of a cruelest hell
of infinite symbol,
sound and smell.
 Jun 2012 Saul Makabim
Odi
eyes flicker in and out of conciousness
I stare daggers into walls
dance around chanting some heroic theme song
insert ****** babble
for those of us
who feel too heavy
like invisible chains drag across our ankles
and we hold boulders on our shoulders
that no one else can see
a curse taken from the japanese
or chinese
memory isnt one of our strong points
With razor sharp tongues we see people
sliced up
infront of us
shattering every pathetic little meaning of their existence
no remorse
turn away when there is blood
slice it up, we all have cuts
and bruises and certain scars
Ill paint my filth across these halls
and tell you about what a ***** little ***** I've been
Ill get real messy
and laugh when you call me a *****
for those of us who forget to eat
or want to forget to eat
know that , that weight will never go away
it stays at the pit of your stomach
you will never implode
always be at the peak of something like
a ****** that never happens
For those of us who drink too much
and laugh at how that sounds
because it really  never is enough
we have a certain kind of grit
that never leaves our colon
stays stuck in our intestines
we have a certain kind of fire that burns
its way up our throats and into our eyes
we speak like broken glass

I clawed my demons in the face
gauged out their eyes with my bare hands
I painted victory blood on that ivory staircase
Did my little dance
And then we tasted the laughter of children
knowing we will never again know how that feels
but spend the rest of our lives wanting to
get that feeling back
stare at the helplessness
in your empty hands
these hands could hold
and hit
and cut and stab and mash and grab
they  can caress, though
we break
so
easily
You have to understand, this **** only comes when Im too tired to think. Sorry
The pale wind whispers to the dark heart,
the one who wears his feathers
more as guise than garment.
It carries him onward
to lead a blackened life
as the harbinger of doom
and servant to the hooded spectre.
The wind rises beneath colossal wings
that close over the unfortunate
like the silk lined coffin lid -
he is lifted ever higher
Just something I thought up in a few minutes but I thought would be worth posting
I think I’ll drop guitars
Watch them fall and crack
Strangers would pick them up
And pluck a broken tune
Upon their broken necks
And sit with broken bones
Singing broken words
Their minds broken long ago
By ******* politics
Crushing voice and body alike
Breaking bones into conformist shapes.
Their broken dreams
May yet be given
Wings of grace and flight
Their broken eyes
Might just yet see the light
And perhaps,
Perhaps,
There’s still some hope
For these bones
To heal some.
This was inspired by a Facebook conversation about dropping broken guitars instead of bombs - make music, not war <3
eyes are burning
lips are cracked
mind is reeling
body's smacked
falling further
down the hole
give me more
then take my soul

******* on all my perceptions
***** me over with one hit
but i choose this infection
threw myself into this pit
take away my memories
blinding all i see
replacing it with neediness
burying it deep inside of me

spit the poison in my mouth
just like i knew you would
i gladly swallow every drop
i've gotten really good
go ahead and **** on everything i'll never be
farewell to awareness and my sensibility

fingers twitching
eyes are squint
nose is dripping
latest stint
its getting harder to crawl
with these broken bones
while you're stripping me down
and you're throwing your stones

go ahead and **** whats left of my vision
this habit wont put up a fight
options seem lost to just one decision
one more fix to get through the night

now spit the poison in my mouth
its what i wanted too
i'll lick and **** up every drop
i can get out of you

liquid drips from my mouth
its such a ***** brown
and i smile when, temporarily
it lifts me off the ground
I am not a poet. I don't know much about syntax, punctuation! etc. I just want to write what I feel.
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