This  is more like the original, which I prefer:

That Door

dear lights

moving on, moving on
wonder what tune they whistle now?

what sort of beauty they structure and spin
there, beyond this worry and woe?

wonder what wonder they feel before reaching out
for their new-cast burdens of joy

and join in the
Unity! Unity! ...and Praise!

leaving weeping shadows behind...
did they

cast one last glance of pity and understanding
over their shoulders?

as we bend to resume our urgent tasks of love
hoping to earn the key to That door.