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May 2022
the people sauntering
around us are their own celestial bodies detached from the outside world
in their mind, inside their screens —they are far, far away.

we pass pedestrians on the street, towards
the same corner park, where we sit and chat, but we are light years from the other folks and from one another. and i wondering if i tilted my phone and aim it’s reflection into their eyes if they’d receive it, if the speed of light is really all it’s cracked up to be then how quickly can it reach them play my golden record of connection “hello, from this child of planet earth with oversized limbs”
Allude to Voyager space craft’s golden record
Recording of “hello from the children of earth”

Symbols that I wish to further connect

1. star and their distance
to people and their distance from each other

Hyperbole/ exaggeration: distance between human being

Overall focus/ shine a light on: phone as a source of disconnection from reality or human interaction as well as nature.

Nature: possibilities to tie in :
1. Insert fauna/ flora that is symbolic of connection or disconnection
Look up flowers and withering spans
+ things that are interdependent??
Maybe

Or different direction: ??

Review title
Draft 3
Guadalupe S Partida
Written by
Guadalupe S Partida  31/Clovis, CA
(31/Clovis, CA)   
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