Once bound in steel inviolable repression bands are soon unlocked when influenced by passions rule which previously firm pride forbade.
Already drawn to fully span the sadness sloughed and soon replaced to manifest the plighted faith by novelty of love’s first bite.
Thanks James for your comments which I very much appreciate and which made me reread the poem several times over. May I add that I am new to this site and haven't yet found how to respond so am adding my response by way of a comment. As I said I have reread the poem and my own preference is for the first verse which I find flows better and contains a greater fluency of ideas whereas the second verse has rather random ideas which do not necessarily relate. It just shows how poetry, like other art forms is very much in the eye of the beholder/reader.