returning to this after almost a month and im close to scrapping it??.. first im gonna try fixing the grammar and lines then if it's still an issue, ill split it. otherwise ill just cut a whole chunk out.
broken sleep,
discontinued dreams,
tossing and turning
at four in the morning.
i barely sleep anymore.
its too hot beneath these covers,
im too cold now,
i need to be held,
im gonna die in my sleep one day.
i cant turn my brain off.
i always get broken sleep,
i forever get those discontinued,
unfinished --
extremely real like dreams.
i toss and turn all night long
still uncomfortable after each turn
and roll,
one way
and then the other.
i cant stop
and take a break.
give me...
just
one
break.
yeah i think this is better. still unsure. will revisit tomorrow!
Oct 6, 2025
Oct 6, 2025 at 10:44 AM UTC
i received some help (you know who you are) to make this piece better. and i think it worked. it flows better. so thank you. and i think just a few final touches and it's done?
before;
i dont know
how to love you
or trust you
after ive been hurt..
but i wasn't hurt
by you.
i was hurt
by someone who i loved
and trusted.
and i dont know
how to do it again
after i was betrayed
like that.
so easily --
and they didn't look back.
i just don't want
to get hurt again.
i don't think i could
handle it.
after;
i dont know
how to
love you
or trust you
after ive been hurt..
i was hurt
by someone
who i loved
and trusted.
and i dont know
how to do it again
after i was
betrayed
so easily..
i just don't want
to get hurt again.
i don't think i could
handle it
this time.
i like this version more.
Oct 6, 2025
Oct 6, 2025 at 10:39 AM UTC
hello. long time no see... haven't been writing too much as of late but.. im returning with one im very unsure about. so please give me your opinions. i want them and need to make this better because it is not conveying how i feel!
i never quite understood
what people meant when they said
"you'll have big feelings
when you're a teenager.
they're really strong."
i didn't quite get
the extent of what they meant
by that.
but now i get it.
you're constantly upset with yourself
for little things.
like not having that clear skin
you desperately want
but can't get
because you're hormonal
and the acne just won't stop
to the point it frustrated you --
then you begin to compare yourself
to the kids that surround you.
or when you scroll on instagram
and tiktok
seeing these people
so thin,
flat tummies.
they make it look like
it's healthy,
it's easy.
but it's not.
you need to learn
that you are allowed
to have a thicker body
because it's healthy.
but you don't get that.
because when you're going through
puberty,
and hormone changes,
and growth spurts --
you compare and compare
and why?
all you see is edited bodies online.
your whole life is
on your little phone.
you see it no matter what.
and you grow accustomed to
comaparing yourself
to the point it's
all
you
ever
do.
you can't stop.
you talk down on yourself and it
just somehow makes you feel worse
than before.
because you have big feelings.
and they're strong.
so you need to look after yourself
in the healthiest way
you can.
hoping to come back to this account a bit more.. but we'll see! :)
Oct 6, 2025
Oct 6, 2025 at 10:38 AM UTC
not too sure how to feel so im just uploading this to get your opinions!
broken sleep,
discontinued dreams,
tossing and turning
at four in the morning.
i barely sleep anymore.
*its too hot under these covers,
im too cold now,
i need to be held,
im gonna die in my sleep.*
i cant turn my brain off.
i get broken sleep,
i get those discontinued
unfinished --
extremely real feeling dreams,
i toss and turn all night long
still uncomfortable after each turn.
i cant stop
and take a break.
let me know what you think
Sep 13, 2025
Sep 13, 2025 at 12:21 PM UTC
thinking of either scrapping it or trying again. not too sure.. gonna try to change it up first and see how i go. because honestly? i think it deserves a second chance. the idea is there.
before i change it;
i dont know
how to love
and trust you
after ive been hurt.
not by you.
but by someone who i loved
and trusted.
and i dont know
how to do it again.
after;
i dont know
how to love you
or trust you
after ive been hurt..
but i wasn't hurt
by you.
i was hurt
by someone who i loved
and trusted.
and i dont know
how to do it again
after i was betrayed
like that.
so easily --
and they didn't look back.
i just don't want
to get hurt again.
i don't think i could
handle it.
i still hate it. but i think im gonna just put it on myserie anyway because the idea is there and i think it's got a small chance. it's very difficult for me to explain how i feel. most of my poems take a few tries to fully get my whole point across, but this one i just can't seem to at all. so im gonna upload it, either way. because i think it'll help with my emotions.
Sep 13, 2025
Sep 13, 2025 at 12:20 PM UTC
fixed it up and im gonna call it "a way to tell your story"
words on paper.
it's simple.
but for some,
for me especially,
it's more
than just words on paper.
it's feelings,
storytelling,
a way to express your opinions
it's everything to me
so yeah, it is words on paper
but it's more than that too.
:)) okayy
Sep 8, 2025
Sep 8, 2025 at 9:08 PM UTC
turning the thought into something for real now so..
i dont know
how to love
and trust you
after ive been hurt.
not by you.
but by someone who i loved
and trusted.
and i dont know
how to do it again.
not sure ahaha.. constructive criticism?
the og idea:
its not hard for me to love
though it is hard for me to trust again after betrayal
:)
Sep 8, 2025
Sep 8, 2025 at 8:48 PM UTC
hello again.. back woth this one and a list of titles.. well really just four to choose from.
i couldn't take the aching
the pain; it hurt me,
physically
and emotionally.
so i let it out,
in the worst way i could,
on the people closest to me.
i hurt my best friends --
my day ones,
the people who care too much
about me
to be hurt like that.
by me.
i feel so bad.
i don't know how to fix it.
can i even fix it?
options!
- the ache
- hurt physically and emotionally
- feeling guilty
- big emotions
*im honestly a big fan of the first two.. but im not sure! let me know your opinions!
Sep 8, 2025
Sep 8, 2025 at 10:48 AM UTC
just an idea i came up with awhile ago (25/8) dont know what will come out of this...
its not hard for me to love
though it is hard for me to trust again after betrayal
hii! how are you guys though?
Sep 7, 2025
Sep 7, 2025 at 8:48 PM UTC
im not sure what i want to do with this but.. i wanted to share it on here incase i do not put it on mysterie..
words on paper.
it's really that simple.
but for some,
for me especially,
it's more than words on paper.
it's feelings
storytelling
a way to express your opinions
it's everything to me
so yeah, it is words on paper
but it's more than that too
*i dont remember why i wrote this (bad memory) and it was last months when i hardly remember yesterday.. title ideas?
Sep 7, 2025
Sep 7, 2025 at 8:43 PM UTC