returning to this after almost a month and im close to scrapping it??.. first im gonna try fixing the grammar and lines then if it's still an issue, ill split it. otherwise ill just cut a whole chunk out.
broken sleep,
discontinued dreams,
tossing and turning
at four in the morning.
i barely sleep anymore.
its too hot beneath these covers,
im too cold now,
i need to be held,
im gonna die in my sleep one day.
i cant turn my brain off.
i always get broken sleep,
i forever get those discontinued,
unfinished --
extremely real like dreams.
i toss and turn all night long
still uncomfortable after each turn
and roll,
one way
and then the other.
i cant stop
and take a break.
give me...
just
one
break.
yeah i think this is better. still unsure. will revisit tomorrow!
Oct 6, 2025
Oct 6, 2025 at 10:44 AM UTC
returning to this after almost a month and im close to scrapping it??.. first im gonna try fixing the grammar and lines then if it's still an issue, ill split it. otherwise ill just cut a whole chunk out.
broken sleep,
discontinued dreams,
tossing and turning
at four in the morning.
i barely sleep anymore.
its too hot beneath these covers,
im too cold now,
i need to be held,
im gonna die in my sleep one day.
i cant turn my brain off.
i always get broken sleep,
i forever get those discontinued,
unfinished --
extremely real like dreams.
i toss and turn all night long
still uncomfortable after each turn
and roll,
one way
and then the other.
i cant stop
and take a break.
give me...
just
one
break.
yeah i think this is better. still unsure. will revisit tomorrow!
7/10
