I wept when I saw
Our blue kayak mounted high
on a coffee shop wall
The blue kayak we didn't buy
Is now mounted in a coffee shop
Offering a different escape
We never did buy the blue kayak
Or take that river trip
It's now mounted in a coffee shop
As if it was art
For a different kind of escape.
Jan 15
Jan 15, 2026 at 1:21 PM UTC
I wept when I saw
Our blue kayak mounted high
on a coffee shop wall
The blue kayak we didn't buy
Is now mounted in a coffee shop
Offering a different escape
We never did buy the blue kayak
Or take that river trip
It's now mounted in a coffee shop
As if it was art
For a different kind of escape.
I've been told I should cut the poem down, discarding any extraneous words. Which version works best do you think?
