through the thick soup of human plankton
a tiny gray particle
me
in the thick soup of bodies
human plankton
me
looking up
the sun clouded by layers of human plankton
above me
me
looking up
skies obscured by layers of human plankton
above me
me
pushing my way up through the thick layers of human plankton
upwards
for just one, just one
breath of fresh air
Dec 5, 2012
Dec 5, 2012 at 6:58 PM UTC
through the thick soup of human plankton
a tiny gray particle
me
in the thick soup of bodies
human plankton
me
looking up
the sun clouded by layers of human plankton
above me
me
looking up
skies obscured by layers of human plankton
above me
me
pushing my way up through the thick layers of human plankton
upwards
for just one, just one
breath of fresh air
Does it look better in this shape?