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Starlit seeking waves against a summer's blow meet a shallow shore on a midnight of May. A day dreamer grazes white lights of a night sky with twinkled gazes-she wished for a touch, bare feet tickles wet sand, heartbeats skips a harmony, a longing desire locks and loads firing wanderlust into star-soot boots on and upwards she goes becoming breathing breaths of a dream, that wished to live, and live it did 10 Mays later- amidst violent radiance a contrail climbs- through earth's window and into a void of shadowed dawn she goes. The End.
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Dec 31, 2016
Dec 31, 2016 at 12:34 AM UTC
An Astronaut's May Midnight.
Starlit seeking waves against a summer's blow meet a shallow shore on a midnight of May. A day dreamer grazes white lights of a night sky with twinkled gazes-she wished for a touch, bare feet tickles wet sand, heartbeats skips a harmony, a longing desire locks and loads firing wanderlust into star-soot boots on and upwards she goes becoming breathing breaths of a dream, that wished to live, and live it did 10 Mays later- amidst violent radiance a contrail climbs- through earth's window and into a void of shadowed dawn she goes. The End.
work in progress, rip it apart.. any suggestions? Trying to write about a girl who wants to go into space to explore the vast universe; but I want the poem to be a picture of a moment in time when she realized, it was possible. I don't like what I have written so far so don't pander me with a generic comment about you loving my poem (blah blah blah); Please don't do that, it irritates me. If you liked it, tell me why and tell me what needs to be improved.
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Dec 31, 2016
Dec 31, 2016 at 12:34 AM UTC
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