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she asked him: why did you leave Edinburgh? and he didn't reply, but upon thinking out his reply to a deaf ear: because i didn't come here for you; 'lona 'lona, whisper sometimes, and i'll give you a cat's whisker. i was in venice, yes, i drank absinthe the wrong way on a beach, spent three nights in a hostel with a bunch of girls, took a hebrew girl for a taste of tourism, listened to the shofar before i entered a synagogue outlet extension reading the 613 commandments on a computer screen... venice's pavement traffic and eating pistachio gelato, nothing much, i still preferred the Gothic distancing of Edinburgh's nights where i could be with cold-hands and warm heart inviting; basically i don't like tourist basins, or tourist wombs for that matter... am i looking at something predictable? yes, i am, a billion other sperms will see the same thing and perhaps write about it to insinuate poetic ambitions - too clogged up your thinking is to redeem yourself in poetry - you're hardly dislodged for the art - get a guitar and couplet it for a star-riddled pop music hit, go on, on your way, elbow push through the queue... go on, on your way... oh wait, you need clapping to spur you on?               here's my clapping onomatopoeia: blah blah, blah blah, blah blah; yes, i was in venice, didn't really care to write much about it - i actually didn't, just now, a sobering memory, not the type of memory that gets you drunk... well it's there, a bit like the Maldives, and it drives the delusion that global warming isn't creeping about the place like Nosferatu.
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Mar 6, 2016
Mar 6, 2016 at 7:31 AM UTC
Edinburgh v. Venice
she asked him: why did you leave Edinburgh? and he didn't reply, but upon thinking out his reply to a deaf ear: because i didn't come here for you; 'lona 'lona, whisper sometimes, and i'll give you a cat's whisker. i was in venice, yes, i drank absinthe the wrong way on a beach, spent three nights in a hostel with a bunch of girls, took a hebrew girl for a taste of tourism, listened to the shofar before i entered a synagogue outlet extension reading the 613 commandments on a computer screen... venice's pavement traffic and eating pistachio gelato, nothing much, i still preferred the Gothic distancing of Edinburgh's nights where i could be with cold-hands and warm heart inviting; basically i don't like tourist basins, or tourist wombs for that matter... am i looking at something predictable? yes, i am, a billion other sperms will see the same thing and perhaps write about it to insinuate poetic ambitions - too clogged up your thinking is to redeem yourself in poetry - you're hardly dislodged for the art - get a guitar and couplet it for a star-riddled pop music hit, go on, on your way, elbow push through the queue... go on, on your way... oh wait, you need clapping to spur you on?               here's my clapping onomatopoeia: blah blah, blah blah, blah blah; yes, i was in venice, didn't really care to write much about it - i actually didn't, just now, a sobering memory, not the type of memory that gets you drunk... well it's there, a bit like the Maldives, and it drives the delusion that global warming isn't creeping about the place like Nosferatu.
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Mar 6, 2016
Mar 6, 2016 at 7:31 AM UTC
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