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A poet, an artist, (with little restraint) Penciled words on his canvas, saw no use for paint, Crafted words into pictures; Visions out loud. Of most of his work, was exceedingly proud. Unfettered, unbounded, his huge canvas at wait He brandished his pencil and began to create. Desiring a masterpiece, appealing to all Pride prompted his excess, preceded his fall Trapped in a vortex, surrounded by words, Shared them with others to see if they heard. The public was skeptic, and reflected the same His confidence shattered; His ability shamed He had written with passion, as if possessed But the silence of critics left him redressed. “Who is it says everyone cannot be pleased? Off with their heads!  Get them down on their knees!” He drew a sharp sword, surrendered a laugh, Sliced his canvas to shreds, cut his pencil in half. “I’ve heard your silence, the first version ***** Sharpened his pencil, wrote ‘Surrounded Redux. ’ PwL 4/20/15
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Apr 20, 2015
Apr 20, 2015 at 10:34 PM UTC
Surrounded Redux
A poet, an artist, (with little restraint) Penciled words on his canvas, saw no use for paint, Crafted words into pictures; Visions out loud. Of most of his work, was exceedingly proud. Unfettered, unbounded, his huge canvas at wait He brandished his pencil and began to create. Desiring a masterpiece, appealing to all Pride prompted his excess, preceded his fall Trapped in a vortex, surrounded by words, Shared them with others to see if they heard. The public was skeptic, and reflected the same His confidence shattered; His ability shamed He had written with passion, as if possessed But the silence of critics left him redressed. “Who is it says everyone cannot be pleased? Off with their heads!  Get them down on their knees!” He drew a sharp sword, surrendered a laugh, Sliced his canvas to shreds, cut his pencil in half. “I’ve heard your silence, the first version ***** Sharpened his pencil, wrote ‘Surrounded Redux. ’ PwL 4/20/15
Thank you Arlo, Joe, Puds and LittleFreeBird for liking the original! :-) But even my girlfriend said it "rambled". think I'll post the Haiku and the Limerick separately and see what happens! I do really like writing, so thank you ALL who read my poems! I love the HP group!!
phil-lindsey
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Apr 20, 2015
Apr 20, 2015 at 10:34 PM UTC
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