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Bruises— an amethyst stain of merlot spreading on white carpet. The deep blue of the glistening Belizean sea and the hot weight of you settled beside me. Crimson blood and rising pain— I scar myself because of you again. The flat hazel of your eyes the last time I saw you, hollowed by suffering. Accusatory and pleading, these bruises bleed fresh and tender on the surface of my heart as I will myself to forget you for the last time.
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Nov 14, 2014
Nov 14, 2014 at 1:49 PM UTC
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Bruises— an amethyst stain of merlot spreading on white carpet. The deep blue of the glistening Belizean sea and the hot weight of you settled beside me. Crimson blood and rising pain— I scar myself because of you again. The flat hazel of your eyes the last time I saw you, hollowed by suffering. Accusatory and pleading, these bruises bleed fresh and tender on the surface of my heart as I will myself to forget you for the last time.
This is an edited version of one of my more popular poems. My creative writing professor suggested changing it a bit, so here it is. Let me know which one you think is better and why! Either comment on here or email me at [email protected]
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Nov 14, 2014 at 1:49 PM UTC
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