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The feeling of disheartenment thickening on the inside until it reaches your throat. No longer can you stand it, like barb wire around your neck. You can't breathe by the feelings that have consumed every last inch of your body. Paralysed, you can't move! Your thoughts run wild within your subconscious, images flurrying; changing continuously until you no longer see what's before you. Your heart shatters into devastation, the realisation of the cruel surroundings in which you have succumb. Tears pour down your face, with each trickle you cling to yourself  The desperation in your cries, no one hears your plea .
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Sep 8, 2014
Sep 8, 2014 at 1:28 PM UTC
Disheartenment
The feeling of disheartenment thickening on the inside until it reaches your throat. No longer can you stand it, like barb wire around your neck. You can't breathe by the feelings that have consumed every last inch of your body. Paralysed, you can't move! Your thoughts run wild within your subconscious, images flurrying; changing continuously until you no longer see what's before you. Your heart shatters into devastation, the realisation of the cruel surroundings in which you have succumb. Tears pour down your face, with each trickle you cling to yourself  The desperation in your cries, no one hears your plea .
Ok so I'm new to this type of poetry, not sure what style this is but I'm writing with feeling my grammar probably isn't perfect either but if anyone can give me any advice, it would be most appreciated :)
samanthauz
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Sep 8, 2014
Sep 8, 2014 at 1:28 PM UTC
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