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winona-forever
winona-forever
Irish Critique my writing, help me progress.
With a loss pain will always come across. I am not one to inflict pain, I see you have enough racing through your veins. With pain comes confusion illusions. One's mind may find peace in chaos. Silence of one's mind may take off. Leaves you with reality and pain and everything else from which you abstain.
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Jan 21, 2013
Jan 21, 2013 at 4:01 PM UTC
Confusion
Nothing else said. Wipe your used soles as to avoid imperfection. Beaten until acceptable once again, never attractive to a stranger's eye though. Just wipe their soles and continue. Reason unknown; they bring a new mat home. I guess that's just how it is.
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Nov 30, 2012
Nov 30, 2012 at 5:29 AM UTC
Welcome
You are the sun; you brighten my world even if the skies are grey. You affect so much more than you can understand. You are the sea; you are beautiful even with sharks in the water. You hold so much mystery. You are a tree; you stand tall when others give. You create inspire without moving an inch. You are human; you can control what others can't. You're cryptic a puzzle I'd like to solve.
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Nov 29, 2012
Nov 29, 2012 at 6:46 AM UTC
Beautiful
Let's go. Public places people everyone. "Hello," stranger says. Seclusive as I tend to be. "You know, gentle jaws reside inside me." Below my multitudinous mask there is trust in no one.
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Oct 9, 2012
Oct 9, 2012 at 2:37 AM UTC
No one
Comfy cozy secure so sure. Home is where the heart is that's what they say but what if the heart runs astray? It searches, seeks, always speaks. Yells, screams but never tells what it needs. Writhes, stuggles mimes mumbles. Where do you want to be? So difficult to heed, strenuous to please. Never content, always argument. Logic, bliss, they resent one another. Will it ever be harmonious?
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Sep 5, 2012
Sep 5, 2012 at 12:11 AM UTC
Home
The words you have preached have been branded. Make us ponder learn. And as we look up at you, you don't realise who we look up to. Your spirit has influenced ours in ways unimaginable. You are what you have produced: Respectful tots, responsible minors, rigid adults. We spread your inimitable wisdom, so well-earned. Forever in your debt, forever you linger forever appreciated forever remembered.
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Sep 3, 2012
Sep 3, 2012 at 7:07 PM UTC
Inspiration
Pathetic drooling savage fools. Inflicting such cruelty upon themselves. The impact left, undoubtedly deserved like the smouldering fire that eats and chars. The warmth is nice comforting, easing but with ******* beings there is no pleasing. Feed the fire.. watch it grow.. admire the glow.. beautiful blaze.. it's too large.. Ignorant, negligent. So destructive, it wants to ravage. Smothered in heat and passion. Burning while you sit and watch, inadvertently. Pleading while you play along, phlegmatically. Look at the scenery, isn't it marvellous? The beast comes out, you become arguous. There's no more beauty in the flame, the burns and scars have ruined its name.
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Aug 30, 2012
Aug 30, 2012 at 2:26 PM UTC
Folly
Mind, stabbing at trauma, so digusting. But escape, recognise the trauma of the earth. Given such devalued matter to feed on its whole existence, yet it always makes something beautiful. Blooming flowers, lofty trees, stormy mountains, seven seas. All the beauty in the world created by unappreciated benefactors. Maybe the repulsing brutes that taunt me so will grow into something beautiful.
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Aug 30, 2012
Aug 30, 2012 at 3:27 AM UTC
Creation
The warmth your grasp provides to my hip. Hair scattered as vines growing around one another. Find your way through. Gentle lips landing spreading passion down through the delicate bone structure. Finally I feel again your tender touch, genuine sincerity. Pure bliss so secure. Such a beauty it is, the time spent in your presence bed arms. Immeasurable ardour. Infinite euphoria. Immense passion, increasing exponentially.
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Aug 29, 2012
Aug 29, 2012 at 5:31 AM UTC
Passion
You speak, there's a fork in your tongue. I placed it as gruesomely as I could, just as you did with knives in my back. Your words, simple myths, spewed it so horribly. Your words, mediocre myths, yet so credible. They should be recorded, passed down, as you pass on; down. Hell beckons you. You remove the fork and I see your horns how could you have hidden them before?
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Aug 27, 2012
Aug 27, 2012 at 9:51 PM UTC
Myths