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jet-set-trash
jet-set-trash
I recently started to write my own poems. Since I am fairly new to this I would appreciate criticism. / / PS: English is not my main language.
you are working hard, to keep this laziness alive. You drown in dark, push down an empty hive. Why beat so fast and freeze my body like ice? You can't let love last so why do you still thrive?
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May 6, 2014
May 6, 2014 at 9:38 AM UTC
Love *****
"Find something to **** and let it love you." - Barles Chukowski
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May 6, 2014
May 6, 2014 at 8:51 AM UTC
It's all about perspective
When you said you did not want me was it love that hurt or pride? Like a near death experience all our ecstasy flashed right before my eyes. How could you not value our memories? a treasure I only opened at night. The town was asleep - at last I was lonely. Now you would only be mine. Oh how rich you made my singularity. An injection to make me feel outright. Your dark side only made us more lively. As I wanted to win this fight. Even though it bruised my soul and body You were the air that made me sigh. But you said you did not want me. What did I lose? Was it love or my pride?
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May 4, 2014
May 4, 2014 at 9:25 AM UTC
Love or pride?