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courtney-dougal
courtney-dougal
American I am a college student who writes to feel. Please critique.
and the music left babe so I did to. the notes drifted, listlessly, into my heart. they wrapped around every vein and muscle. it moved me, closer to the edge. I swayed softly, and sauntered over to peek. to see you and my ending, all neatly written in. the chorus was sung. I picked up the tempo, and got the beat down pat. I missed the steps, couldn’t fall in line. but your grip steered me straight, and I followed the lead. I danced to our song, and uttered the line you fed me. the whole world rejoiced and sang in it. the house was full of chimes, and they played background to our laughter. but slowly rust invaded, the notes quieted. my veins were strung tight, and the chorus didn’t match the tempo. the grip tightened, and the lines I said were forgotten. the music left me in house empty of life. chimes were in my nightmares, and the songs stopped me. my ending was erased when the notes drifted out.
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Mar 4, 2012
Mar 4, 2012 at 11:32 PM UTC
musical misgivings
The only thing I did today… I will never be one of the great ones. She proclaimed, “Mediocre.” I have licked the lollipop of mediocrity, the sweetness pulled me in. The never trying harder, became easier. Laying down, lying about laying down. I will go nowhere, and nowhere will welcome me. For I am as mediocre as any member of nowhere can be. The machine of dull people will **** me in, another cog in slow motion doing nothing. I will never be quoted, nor doted upon by any hero. Never a leading lady just the shadow around the spotlight. Mediocrity is an evil friend, one who I welcomed into my head. No matter how much I plod him, he never pays his rent. Me and mediocrity are fated betrothed, but no matter because I’ve forgotten what light looks like. And striving to see is forbidden by mediocrity and me.
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Nov 7, 2011
Nov 7, 2011 at 10:09 PM UTC
The only thing I did today...
one finger grips your life, and your teeth grind together, like the stone below, grating. inside your heart the head is beating, screaming to stay together. but your green eyes, they slip to the right and down, "dont look, please baby." I know you'll do it anyways because they truly were my downfall. and you exhale slowly, the sight of death so close. his warm breath, turns your cheeks pink and your eyelashes flutter. A final smile spashes your face, the finger slips and you let go. the black whole ***** me in, sickly sweet it feels. "The faithful will always wait." the sentence you whispered, in your death, to me. tightened my face, it stopped my heart. it made me miss you and leave you in one fell sweep. but I wait for you in faithfulness.
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Nov 3, 2011
Nov 3, 2011 at 12:08 AM UTC
maintain faithfulness
You buzz around my face black fly. the enemy retreats and BACK again you come to torture me on this glorious day shoo fly don’t bother me may I use your thousands of eyes fly? for I have a pest that wont leave me be if you were me and I was you fly would you swat and swing at me?
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Nov 1, 2011
Nov 1, 2011 at 9:55 PM UTC
Buzzing
Seasons have become clocks        tick tock heart beats    dancing through the      veins of ancestors    rhythms beat the drum              boom boom              spring forward     fall back to the music of nature of life of past, present, future of                                                                                                                  seasons changing.
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Nov 1, 2011
Nov 1, 2011 at 9:51 PM UTC
Changing
Branches grow but do we see them Twist and turn Which tree do you belong to? I ask. Which tree do I belong to? I ask. The scene of love transcends through all beings Passion filters up the new bark, falling and filling each crevice. I dance in my own wind, I turn I cannot tell whose branch is whose Smiles play tricks on mouths The trees know, they must.
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Nov 1, 2011
Nov 1, 2011 at 9:50 PM UTC
Our Limb
Nights eyes wink and twinkle watching me The man with a cat grin surrounded by miles of black sea I know this man, he has been watching my whole life always above capturing the dreams that surface pop and fizzle away. feather headed and stuffed among crumpled clouds I lay What do you see man? You have been looking for so long and every night I wait too, to look myself.
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Nov 1, 2011
Nov 1, 2011 at 9:48 PM UTC
Man in the Moon
Of fate and fury behind blundered blurry down the trodden plight to night will be one of fancy fine feasts set with the best wine dance my young fertile friend for it will not last a long while don’t fret but place your bet on the previous past lives that’s how they got their wives its time to grow and become a man set the pace and take it, you can implant yourself deep inside let it ride yes, finally the scene is set now the women are left in debt.
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Nov 1, 2011
Nov 1, 2011 at 9:44 PM UTC
titleless
Crisp, sweet Macintosh, the word flushes cheeks and brings smiles along with flavors of apple sauce and pie. Memories swim through thought along with taste Fall leaves surround the trunk the sweet smell of orchards, giggles surround the rows of fruit. Fresh appreciation rolls over taste buds of flowers producing barrels of golden delicious ready for picking in mid-October firm crisp sweet and juicy reach up into the leaves grasp firm with a little twist and the gift from above is one of a kind.
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Nov 1, 2011
Nov 1, 2011 at 8:08 PM UTC
Red Creation
The poetic hands shake and wrattle and roll move move move move move move move move please do They dream to type and dance and write a merry trail they tapped and diddly dapped along with the pet moose who ran after a goose and left left left left left left left right after the chance I got to see him lasted a squirrels second wait a minute don’t leave me mr. moose but he was in love with a pet goose.
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Nov 1, 2011
Nov 1, 2011 at 8:05 PM UTC
Pet Moose