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James Khan Feb 2
Just whistle, lad and try to hold a tune,

It never rains in France for very long,

By grace of ***, we'll all be back home soon,

The lambent light these Frenchman call la lune

Is dampened dark by Mars' infernal song,

Just whistle, lad and try to hold a tune,

Our gaunt and haunted faces streaked maroon

are advocates for all that has gone wrong,

By Grace of *** we'll all be back home soon,

Unhallowed now, our ditch describes a tomb

and backs of heads afloat are pulled along,

Just whistle, lad and try to hold a tune,

There's sausage, boy and mash so grab a spoon

And hear the Springfield ring the dinner-gong,

By grace of *** we'll all be back home soon,

Our place is not to challenge nor impugn

The principles that make our nation strong,

Just whistle, lad and try to hold a tune,

By Grace of *** we'll all be back home soon.
Linking in with my other poem, Tranquility this Villanelle also encompasses the conflicts across the Albett-Baupamme Road where two significant landmark positions were known as Sausage Valley and, of course the adjacent one, Mash Valley by the Allied forces.

I've taken liberty with a few words such as 'there's' and 'we've' to keep a consistent meter throughout. Please forgive this poetic faux pas and pretend it's proper iambic pentameter.

The villanelle consists of five stanzas of three lines (tercets) followed by a single stanza of four lines (a quatrain) for a total of nineteen lines.[21] It is structured by two repeating rhymes and two refrains: the first line of the first stanza serves as the last line of the second and fourth stanzas, and the third line of the first stanza serves as the last line of the third and fifth stanzas.[21] The rhyme-and-refrain pattern of the villanelle can be schematized as A1bA2 abA1 abA2 abA1 abA2 abA1A2 where letters ("a" and "b") indicate the two rhyme sounds, upper case indicates a refrain ("A"), and superscript numerals (1 and 2) indicate Refrain 1 and Refrain 2.[6]
and on the third day,
he erased you –
from his memory,

and mind.

perhaps you can soon,
get over him,

James Khan Feb 2
the city's veins are neon slivers,
puncturing converging planes
where lambent eyes flow past in rivers,
culture stains
the city's veins,

beneath it all a plastic passion,
manufactured mirror-ball,
the haute couture, the pop-up fashion,
creatures crawl
beneath it all,

indulgence chokes the avaricious,
mirrors masked by scented smoke
allure to something cold and vicious,
vices coax,
indulgence chokes,

the urban sprawl of fallen virtue,
lights and sounds invite, enthrall,
priorities of life desert you,
under all
the urban sprawl,

the city's veins, beneath it all
indulgence chokes the urban sprawl.
This is a form I created myself, entitled Form 27a (it took me that many attempts and I might improve it). The form uses alternating meter and feminine syllabic end-rhyme as well as a mandatory internal rhyme in line one, used as a refrain for the crowning line.


ABABa where 'a' is the refrain of the first four syllables of line one.

With a syllable count such as this, the poem can begin with iambic meter and roll on seamlessly until the end without missing a beat. This way, the poem switches from iambic to trochaic meter line by line, thanks to the odd syllable count.

See what you think. Feedback welcomed. Criticism, too.
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