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i step further forward with every breath and down deeper with every step and i'll give my excuses out loud to everyone around except you branches intertwining above our heads roots down below, invisible everything is so much more poetic less with the carefully thought-out adjectives and well-placed commas and more with the phrases that just drop from the sky leave the capitals and punctuation behind i'm forgetting the english language and i kinda love it further forward with every breath and down deeper with every single lower-case step
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Dec 1, 2013
Dec 1, 2013 at 2:30 AM UTC
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i step further forward with every breath and down deeper with every step and i'll give my excuses out loud to everyone around except you branches intertwining above our heads roots down below, invisible everything is so much more poetic less with the carefully thought-out adjectives and well-placed commas and more with the phrases that just drop from the sky leave the capitals and punctuation behind i'm forgetting the english language and i kinda love it further forward with every breath and down deeper with every single lower-case step
somebody stripped the sense from my poetry, what the ****
r-saba
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Dec 1, 2013
Dec 1, 2013 at 2:30 AM UTC
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