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Not too long ago but the wisdom still alluded me And not be Frank, I was never one for the Ocean and sand. So the salt in my lungs, your gaze into my eyes was new to me. Scared but not enough to tell you, I took your hand. (The waves felt good on my coarse skin.) No TVs there, it was Remote. The locals wagered on a pair of dice. Coladas with two cubes a pair of ice. I was living in, and you are my Paradise. Everything I wanted and more, but still not willing to sacrifice (I rebel, I rebel) All that was asked was reciprocation. She said” Boy just say my name, that’s all I want” “ Show me joules. Life, Love, and Dedication.” Told her “ stop trippin” She said ”why you front?” (Time Passed) All that was asked was reciprocation. But society’s serpent wouldn’t let me. ( Boys aren’t supposed to feel) Eve’s whisper led me to condemnation. ( No room for my pride) Wiped the Salt water from my eyes “Just don’t forget me.” ( she apathetically pointed at the door) The rain fell … I’ll never forget raindrops I felt, that night I plead with you Same raindrops I felt that first night that I kissed you. And I cannot lie and say that I don’t miss you. …That I don’t miss my paradise. But – sometimes stories don’t end the way you want’m to right? (Lost Happiness, Lingering Pain) I miss you Right hand to god, Left hand holding the remains of my heart.
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Feb 15, 2016
Feb 15, 2016 at 4:43 PM UTC
Stranded in Eden
Not too long ago but the wisdom still alluded me And not be Frank, I was never one for the Ocean and sand. So the salt in my lungs, your gaze into my eyes was new to me. Scared but not enough to tell you, I took your hand. (The waves felt good on my coarse skin.) No TVs there, it was Remote. The locals wagered on a pair of dice. Coladas with two cubes a pair of ice. I was living in, and you are my Paradise. Everything I wanted and more, but still not willing to sacrifice (I rebel, I rebel) All that was asked was reciprocation. She said” Boy just say my name, that’s all I want” “ Show me joules. Life, Love, and Dedication.” Told her “ stop trippin” She said ”why you front?” (Time Passed) All that was asked was reciprocation. But society’s serpent wouldn’t let me. ( Boys aren’t supposed to feel) Eve’s whisper led me to condemnation. ( No room for my pride) Wiped the Salt water from my eyes “Just don’t forget me.” ( she apathetically pointed at the door) The rain fell … I’ll never forget raindrops I felt, that night I plead with you Same raindrops I felt that first night that I kissed you. And I cannot lie and say that I don’t miss you. …That I don’t miss my paradise. But – sometimes stories don’t end the way you want’m to right? (Lost Happiness, Lingering Pain) I miss you Right hand to god, Left hand holding the remains of my heart.
My own spin on Adam and Eve Adam - the protaganist Eve- his pride Serpent- society deadly sin- not showing his love for paradise( the place and girl) joules/jewels is a double entendre
jettison-harris
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Feb 15, 2016
Feb 15, 2016 at 4:43 PM UTC
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