Words could not describe the aching in my
heart. The silence roars an anxious song like an
eternal sea crashing the waves onto the shore,
never looks at where it came from. Nobody knows.
Heavy breaths blow my frizzy baby hairs in
every direction and they touch your nose,
longing for the affection my depression begged you for.
Everyone tells me that I should never beg for love.
Fools they are for thinking
that I couldn't go on my knees.
Jun 9, 2019
Jun 9, 2019 at 5:56 PM UTC
Words could not describe the aching in my
heart. The silence roars an anxious song like an
eternal sea crashing the waves onto the shore,
never looks at where it came from. Nobody knows.
Heavy breaths blow my frizzy baby hairs in
every direction and they touch your nose,
longing for the affection my depression begged you for.
Everyone tells me that I should never beg for love.
Fools they are for thinking
that I couldn't go on my knees.
This is my first attempt at an acrostic poem as a part of a poetry prompt to try writing in a form/style I have never tried before. THIS IS A VERY ROUGH FIRST DRAFT THAT I NEED CRITIQUES ON - PLEASE LEAVE CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISMS. My intent for the piece was to convey the heartbreak the speaker feels when all of a sudden their partner leaves and the speaker is left begging for love. I really want feedback and critiques so that I can move this "dead" poem forward.