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Seasonal construction Path of destruction and rebuild, Traffic crazy, in the car ahead, Face yelling at a speaker phone, Zig-zag path like the road owner, 3:05 late so a five o'clock date, And a seagull sits right on the line, Patient Mockery so sublime, The seagull "walks the line" Waiting can be a hating game, That would be a vacation shame, shame, Shame. So now the seagull is not alone on the line. ©DWE092013
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Sep 12, 2013
Sep 12, 2013 at 6:38 PM UTC
Ferry Terminal (no personal pronoun or I challenge)
Seasonal construction Path of destruction and rebuild, Traffic crazy, in the car ahead, Face yelling at a speaker phone, Zig-zag path like the road owner, 3:05 late so a five o'clock date, And a seagull sits right on the line, Patient Mockery so sublime, The seagull "walks the line" Waiting can be a hating game, That would be a vacation shame, shame, Shame. So now the seagull is not alone on the line. ©DWE092013
So did   do right?  No personal pronouns?
darrell-wade-elverum
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Sep 12, 2013
Sep 12, 2013 at 6:38 PM UTC
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