This poem is still a work in progress.... I need some thoughts... Is there anything I should reword or change?
A Visitor in the Morning Fog
Written by Adam M. Snow
Oh what a stage this morning break
Waking to a smoke-like sight
So thick it covers the dawn opaque
The freshly gold now blight
My heart is weak, I feel it ache
Upon this morning sight
Unlike the sun my heart don't hide
Nor in the fog it dwell
Even though and with my pride
This cruel heart I knew so well
Left me alone to stride
In this smokey hell
(more is coming soon)
Feb 2, 2015
Feb 2, 2015 at 9:43 PM UTC
This poem is still a work in progress.... I need some thoughts... Is there anything I should reword or change?
A Visitor in the Morning Fog
Written by Adam M. Snow
Oh what a stage this morning break
Waking to a smoke-like sight
So thick it covers the dawn opaque
The freshly gold now blight
My heart is weak, I feel it ache
Upon this morning sight
Unlike the sun my heart don't hide
Nor in the fog it dwell
Even though and with my pride
This cruel heart I knew so well
Left me alone to stride
In this smokey hell
(more is coming soon)
