Maybe I should view this pen
the way my cat sees it,
As she tries over and over
to pluck it away with her velvet paws
from my hesitant grasp,
in some game she has invented
simply to pass the morning
in joy.
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Haiku version:
While I see a pen
my house cat, a game of joy:
robbery with velvet paws
Tried to write it into a haiku form, but I couldn't decide if it still has the same power of theme and meaning. Thoughts?