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kayla-hicks
I am a 15 year old girl who's dream is to write, and publish my poetry! I'm looking for feedback on my poetry (positive and negative) so i can know what i need to improve on, or what i need to keep doing. Thank you.
you may not have touched me physically but you hurt me mentally lightning doesn't strike in the same place twice and i was not about to let you get the best of me i have become as strong as the steel bars which you now stand amongst i put up my middle finger to three main things: **** abuse, and war and now you have created the worst war which ever existed within one's self by abusing me with your words as you **** my emotions all that's left in my dreams is a black and white memory
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Feb 7, 2011
Feb 7, 2011 at 4:25 PM UTC
a black and white memory
the sun absorbs my energy while the clouds bring back the darkest memories in my own bubble soaring through the sky i pray to my savior because he is the only one who can bring me back to life i look around and see the blurs of my future and the darkness of my past the shadows from the clouds follow me around as if i were dragging them on my leash of sorrow seconds turn into minutes and my tears turn into hours i become the veins in a flower that is dead in the winter hoping for spring so it can finally blossom into something beautiful i'm strangling angels and kissing demons i hear the scratch of my teardrops that cry down my face and the silence of my heart beating slower and faster at the same exact time my dreams turn into coal which then turns to ash i will become a discarded i love you and a thank you when i'm gone i was brought up in a place where i somehow don't belong a discarded memory is what i have become
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Feb 7, 2011
Feb 7, 2011 at 4:19 PM UTC
sorrow
This is for those of you who have dreams that never come true and for you cholas who bang and you cholos who slang getting ready to shoot and after you do you realize you have two of your own fingers staring back at you This is for the **** you's and go to hells you say throwing up a finger pointed directly to who you go to and pray to at night If God's so great why does he take our people away so we can meet them in another life which is supposed to be more bright? This is supposed to be the land of freedom the land of happy, but i'm looking around and see only successful immigrants starin' at me My generation is the one who has to make a difference because the ones before us had the world in their hands but let it slip like butter so everyone else has to be in the gutter and now we're left to suffer cleaning up everyone's mistakes the only question i have is why and different people answer with the same reply because 'You Are The Future!!' This is for all the homosexuals who are supposed to have rights but don't receive them because once gay marriage is allowed the ******* of the United States of America are gonna take over the world? Who are you to tell me and my gay and lesbian peers that it is wrong to love I say me as in bisexual because i am not going to limit my love to only guys, or only girls i will love whoever i may choose because as a citizen of America I have options This is for all you pro-lifers who support abortion shouting spread peace and love and the government who makes choices without the opinion of we the people but who's we anyway let me stand on a steeple and preach to you We The People did not want war!
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Feb 5, 2011
Feb 5, 2011 at 9:11 PM UTC
This is for...
This is for those of you who have dreams that never come true and for you cholas who bang and you cholos who slang getting ready to shoot and after you do you realize you have two of your own fingers staring back at you This is for the **** you's and go to hells you say throwing up a finger pointed directly to who you go to and pray to at night If God's so great why does he take our people away so we can meet them in another life which is supposed to be more bright? This is supposed to be the land of freedom the land of happy, but i'm looking around and see only successful immigrants starin' at me My generation is the one who has to make a difference because the ones before us had the world in their hands but let it slip like butter so everyone else has to be in the gutter and now we're left to suffer cleaning up everyone's mistakes the only question i have is why and different people answer with the same reply because 'You Are The Future!!' This is for all the homosexuals who are supposed to have rights but don't receive them because once gay marriage is allowed the ******* of the United States of America are gonna take over the world? Who are you to tell me and my gay and lesbian peers that it is wrong to love I say me as in bisexual because i am not going to limit my love to only guys, or only girls i will love whoever i may choose because as a citizen of America I have options This is for all you pro-lifers who support abortion shouting spread peace and love and the government who makes choices without the opinion of we the people but who's we anyway let me stand on a steeple and preach to you We The People did not want war!
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Started out little smoking **** til' its dry later needing something different, something else to try So let me introduce myself my name is ******* i play with your mind and mess with your brain I spread like poison straight to the head get addicted to me your hangin' by a thread I take your money you snort it away when push comes to shove i meet you half way I was born to be sold and make the wealthy rich some have been murdered and found in a ditch I will take your teacher and turn her into a stripper dancing extra on the weekends 'cause no one will tip her I've made a nerd drop his books and a queen break her crown once you've walked down my lane you can't turn around I'm worse than abortion your babies will be born addicted i'll make your life worse than you have ever predicted Thoughts of suicide running through your mind you think your not worth it so you snort another line I've destroyed many people some were heroes i'll decrease your bank account from millions to zero I drowned out your loved ones and take away your pain you can shoot you can sniff i'm still in your veins So now that you know me what will you do the choice is yours it's all up to you Take my hand and hold it close just remember the life you chose
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Feb 5, 2011
Feb 5, 2011 at 8:49 PM UTC
My name is *******