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josiah-james
English I am a songwriter who dabbles occasionally in poetry, and am looking for advice and constructive criticism.
Charlatans in doorways Singing of machinery The sudden breakdown Into jaundiced fits They are out soon now Coming clothed in crow’s fine coat And the nearest light Pours from a fiery pit Their thoughts, carried With every exchange of gold Into a narrower sleep The mariner’s shanty Is unsheathed Through the zealots’ Distaste for peace.
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Jul 1, 2010
Jul 1, 2010 at 7:15 AM UTC
Shanty
Several idolatrous revolutions of the Earth: Supposedly the inviolable law and declaration of potential. To be told among the hive that the honey is not sweet enough, or the fate of conception was too delayed, is to sentence a mind to a long-fused and intemperate wait The debt of youth must surely be paid, but alas – too few summers have I known and I have yet to feel that doppler swing to the right; my hands are still soft; my taste is still keen; I have never made nor broken a vow. So I am settled to deflate to penitently delineate and I hold you – arbitrator - to your word.
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Jul 1, 2010
Jul 1, 2010 at 7:14 AM UTC
Well-Founded Predictions
The discs have been thrown in the air and arrange themselves and repeat themselves bombarding this score into a dozen or more equally unsatisfying cremations A glimpse of a temple gave several new designs for which I never intended to borrow: and the whipped up dirt and broken reels of tape have multiplied and piled themselves upon a stake When awake, I grab the shards of horizon - or try, anyway.
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Jul 1, 2010
Jul 1, 2010 at 7:14 AM UTC
Cremations of Notes
He fell into a pleasant debacle of various cures for intelligent thinking And I envied, I swear it but congratulate him too - for a midnight with Venus is more than I can do I, a week ago scoured the alternative and had only a romance with pomp and high taste A series of numbers subsequently demanded; now sadly of fortune am I left to waste In the kindest months I will be left with a few metres of room to roam and despair But never will I under any temptation be swayed from my aim of meeting you there.
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Jul 1, 2010
Jul 1, 2010 at 7:13 AM UTC
A Classical Disdain
They raised that tireless butcher’s knife and removed these grand organs am I to say that I can do more when I have eaten so little? There is something about the mace that will not hesitate to slice up every sheet in these rooms. I wasn’t there all those years ago but I am threatened, recovering then failing so soon. Curse every burst and lay flowers on the grave of the boom.
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Jul 1, 2010
Jul 1, 2010 at 7:12 AM UTC
Burst
Walk walk walk Fortify your freakish walls Step up and fall upon the pulp Of holy minds for precious law. Gather, creature, gather Absorb these crude misleadings Regret the future, deviate Flushed-out skies and rigid feelings. Wait, then stop and wait Start again, without the hand of fate Till depth do us part In the valleys, as a traitor.
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May 19, 2010
May 19, 2010 at 2:34 PM UTC
In the Valleys
Decades ago in a bottle on a bedside in many little poisons. You fade The most heavenly harmony, Is able to rewrite history Too much smoke and meditation made it end I wish I could visit that past and learn to make it last and meet the one I needed in order to form Just one voice and a handful of strings made the universe revolve But every sun is soon eclipsed and every boat later drifts Decades agoin a bottle on a bedside in many little poisons. You fade
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Feb 21, 2010
Feb 21, 2010 at 9:10 AM UTC
Eclipse
From caves we come, with sweet-smelling vials fermented from afar. The witch-doctor wakes the comatose child and grants the success was his alone. While the vials spill and stars are handed out meanings with only an atom of self-worth. Come to me from your caves. Flock across the sky cawing in riotous turmoil - And I will know That you knew So little at first and so little at last.
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Jan 11, 2010
Jan 11, 2010 at 12:38 PM UTC
So Little at Last
I would trade your season for mine, But winter is more comforting Than the flowers of spring. Harvest the snow, And there you have luxury. The white sand of my country, And the pure radiance of yours. On the strings We have slithers of ice And polished brass Is the wind. Hear the percussive surge of river Or the silence seducing empty roads. We have found our orchestra of frosty season. Conducted by currents in the sky.
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Jan 8, 2010
Jan 8, 2010 at 7:28 AM UTC
Five Seasons.
There is a timid storm On the unfeeling airwaves I am the furniture That lines petty stairways There is a furious calm That pacifies the antique But I lack the intelligence To be unique. It is you, In the hallway, That heavy oaken scent Which fills a confused corridor With echoes, with lament. Ambiance tears asunder, A weakened personality. So I ask who’s turn it is …To make the tea?
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Dec 28, 2009
Dec 28, 2009 at 7:43 AM UTC
Echoes of a false Elliot