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hannah-mcc
American i just want some honest opinions. but constructive critisism. dont be an asshole just because you can.
if you could back and meet your 5 year old self... what would you say? would you tell them who you are? would you give advice, assuming you wouldn't jeopardize the final product that is you? or would you let it be... would you simply observe, take their perspective into consideration and try to learn from a simpler, transparently benevolent state of mind? the word naive instantly puts forth the thought of an unintelligent point of view. but i think to have a mind set, that of a less-experienced self, may in fact help a more exposed psyche. the world is so full, in the sense that, we learn so much by the time we are old enough to deem ourselves intelligent, that we forget to think of things more simply. we base everything off of mass, habitual tendencies: the way we are used to thinking instead of what is right, or what is logical, or makes makes sense based off of fact and not emotion or instinct of habit. at the age, although me may feel it effortless to imagine a sense of self, we dont do so. we feel less self conscious but never think of ourselves from anothers perspective, not to say we are selfish but we are reactive in a much more intelligent way than our minds slowly evolve to be.
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Dec 19, 2013
Dec 19, 2013 at 12:51 AM UTC
thoughts (not a poem) random stream of consciousness
I wish I hadn't wasted my summer with him, and instead, with you.
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Oct 11, 2013
Oct 11, 2013 at 4:02 PM UTC
For my Dumpster Pumpkin
I daydream of dreaming a dream: comfortable and surreal. In it, an antique shop full of character and the scent of mothballs and dust. A haphazard maze of dark lit corners pulls me to its depths, where nestled in the back, is a perfectly imperfect piano. Ironic how the blatantly splintered key is the most out of tune, no? In this dream within a daydream, I sit on a squeaking stool, foot on a loose damper, and play all that I know. In this dream to be, I know not, or recognize what I play, but know it's home and find peace in knowing. The name Chopin would be the faintest of underlying memories, but the first upon waking. All we are is what we are not, and were I dreaming this dream, that notion would live in my being; in the pockets of my marrow and in the pit of my throat. No Steinway could produce such a twang so unimaginably beautiful. Only the physically appealing use the word ugly, and only the true understand the word beauty. In my dream to be, I watch myself, but feel the keys as they disintegrate after violently being yanked from slumber. Would I dream, I would gasp and reach in wake, grasping nothing, and yearn again to live without vivid self awareness. Yet when conscious, I seek lucidity, despite the comfort found in effortlessness. So snap me out of it. Slap the porcelain saucer that is my cheek, for I am no Poe, and this no "dream within a dream" but a waltz with the idea of serendipity.
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Sep 26, 2013
Sep 26, 2013 at 4:55 PM UTC
Dim-lit Ivory of Hawthorne
Haiku's are stupid Why would anyone read this? I've wasted your time.
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Sep 6, 2013
Sep 6, 2013 at 1:12 PM UTC
uhhhh...yeah
Shes so bi-polar, the way that she acts; so full of love and then so full of hate. Shit-grinned, she sees how my body reacts. Sometimes I wonder just how we relate. I ask nothing of her, but good intent, and she will rarely provide nothing less. She'll usually cause my joy to relent After which leaving my mind but a mess. The skeptic then scoffed,"Too good to be true." Looking back, he was undoubtedly right Someone so loving and vivid as you, could not endure such a night without spite. So I will cling onto my sanity, as you get a grip on your vanity.
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Sep 6, 2013
Sep 6, 2013 at 12:54 PM UTC
A Girl Named Molly
I shan't let myself type, write, or udder the word that the oh, so shallow misuse. The term that hopeful, gutter ****** mutter; but empty (should it, a hallow abuse). Confused is the callow boy full of thirst, due to courtesans words, so misleading. The harlots fight over who will be first to devour his heart, warm and bleeding. Fleeting is usually how I define ones faux and improper use of the word. If down pours the rain, and water is wine, then wet lushes slur convictions: absurd. You'll never know what you've got til its dawn, and out comes the word, all consciousness gone.
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Sep 6, 2013
Sep 6, 2013 at 4:46 AM UTC
Sonnet #2
I would feed you crepes while the city sleeps, every night, until I die or until my whisking arm gives out. When I gasp with adrenaline as you corner the road, does it drive you crazy, as you drive me mad to buy doughnut holes at 3 A.M. ? We share an addiction to lazy behavior, but differ in our love for coke, for coffee. For what? When we broke years worth of tension I thought it would be more like snapping a dried, autumn twig, the crack of a whip or dropping a florescent tube light-bulb. Instead it was that of morphine; warm and gradual, if at all. I'm sorry I made such delusions, held you high as perfection: an irretrievable beast. I thought myself shallow in thinking I was finally better than you at something. Now I think myself shallow in thinking I could do without you because of your behavior or lack there of. I was wrong. I thought I found the disappointment enough to quench my lust. But I'm yearning just as ever, even knowing what I'm missing. So I'll sit here, knowing we crave the same basics and differ in specifics. I'll sit here writing as I watch you sleep. I'll wait as our ****** tension slowly grows back, like a forgotten perennial , once again making itself evident and waiting for the shing of the garden shears to snip its stalk like a taught thread.
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Sep 3, 2013
Sep 3, 2013 at 1:29 AM UTC
3 A.M. Doughnut Runs...
Ironic how each loafer lacked a penny, though I'm sure they cost him a pretty one. They gleamed meticulously (aside from the scuff inflicted by his Benz) and closely resembled his fathers $2,000 humidor. His father always smelled of cigars and leather, once you got past the 25 year old scotch. He was taught that pewter spoons were childs play and nothing but. Born to a wealthy accountant and flight attendant of New Hampshire, he was not accustomed to the word no. He was a typical, grade A snob, who looked down a nose so bent out of shape, it made Owen Wilson cringe. "That bar exam didn't pass itself." This was the phrase he had coined after years of being told he'd never worked a day in his life and he cowered behind the truth in knowing its the only thing he'd ever accomplished. It may seem pompous at first, but ultimately, the phrase reflected his utter worthlessness. He would never know the meaning behind that very word, nor did he care to attempt to understand it. He made the superiority of his wealth, in comparison to others, evident with every chance presented to him. His selfish attitude was a close second to the first thing you noticed about him; his anchor-print, linen button-up, his gold LeCoultre, and his khaki Lacoste boating shorts. Funny how such a pretty boy, turned out to be the ugliest person you could ever meet.
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Sep 2, 2013
Sep 2, 2013 at 10:37 PM UTC
Ugly goes to the bone...
if i were to say i resembled a bruise, would you think me black or caucasian with blues?
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Jul 24, 2013
Jul 24, 2013 at 1:43 AM UTC
soul
Torn between conflict of facing the truth, and the urge to ignore such predictions. Outside perspective, an internal sleuth, will avoid any sudden afflictions. "But what," says my mind "if wrong is the right-" "- and you brush off your soul's obligations?" Should ignorance fail to conquer the fight, and instinct: that of keen observation. New, sharpened blade severs guilt between guilt, bitter shame sitting right in the center . If you must know me, then know to the hilt, that my mind is a crevice you'll enter. Shed light on masquerade, faces of doubt, Faces of nothing, if light were without.
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Jun 26, 2013
Jun 26, 2013 at 10:23 PM UTC
Torn