I like! Esp:
"i did all i wished with our time
in bed and out of line"

Ouch.

But also, brilliant.

Effing hell, Gem. That was fantastic. Really.

OUCH.

Okay. Wow. Have never read this before. And just.. lovely work, Gem!

Wow. I need to come back to this. So much is said, so powerfully.

This is absolutely lovely. I wish you'd elaborated more, I felt like I was just sinking into the sensation you'd created with your words and the imagery. Great work!

Too true. Well said.

First, I find the name "Gemma Tanka" hilarious. I'm sure you can guess why.

Second: love it.

Nicely said! :)

Haha! Gem!

Gorgeous!