lala nana›Drowning Under Stormy Seas by Molly Claire May 8, 2011
Oh, I really like this! It's a very well-done poem. I'm surprised to see how young you are! The only line I have issue with is "crashes, screams, pain". The "pain" lends it a little bit of an emo mood, if you catch my drift. I'd find a little less of a common word to describe it, I suppose. "Noise" might be a good alternative. Otherwise, it's an exquisite poem! I like it quite a bit! Very good!
lala nana›He's my Dad. by Evie Haywood May 8, 2011
How is this addressing? I'm curious. Is it a step-mother? If so, it sounds a little petulant. If it's about an issue - cancer, maybe? - it's very sweet. It's an interesting poem. Well done.
lala nana›New With New Morning by James Banks Worsham May 7, 2011
This is really beautiful. I love the imagery. Simply stunning. It rounds out very well, in the end, as well. Nicely done!
lala nana›she tore me up by Fenton Caul May 7, 2011
I'm not sure what to think of this. Is it a sexual metaphor or a face-value statement? It's an interesting read, either way!
